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Grammar CHECK!! HELP, PLEASE!!! 100 balls
In June 2020, I received a diploma of secondary general education with an emphasis on the socio-economic profile at Gymnasium 15. Since September 2020, I have been studying to become a system administrator at the Center for Information and Communication Technologies of the College of Entrepreneurship in Kiev

I have completed full-fledged, internationally recognized courses. In 2020, I completed the course "Introduction to the Network" on basic protocols, standards, and hardware configuration at the Cisco Networking Academy. In 2022, I completed the courses Switching, Routing, and Wireless Essentials at the Cisco Networking Academy and Designing, Deploying, and Maintaining a WLAN network at the Huawei ICT Academy. I also completed the course in Enterprise Networking, Security, and Automation at the Cisco Networking Academy in 2023.

I worked as an assistant system administrator at College of Entrepreneurship (Center for Audiovisual Technologies) in June 2022–July 2022 and April 2023–June 2023. I was responsible for performing work on connecting network equipment, diagnosing and troubleshooting minor hardware problems, servicing client workstations and user accounts, maintaining software and applications (Microsoft, Windows, Adobe), setting up backups, maintaining inventory documentation, and consulting users working with applications.

Beyond my technical skills, I possess excellent communication and organizational abilities. I am able to work both independently and as part of a team, demonstrating adaptability and multitasking capabilities.

I am highly self-motivated and have a strong inclination towards self-learning, enabling me to keep up with rapidly changing technological advancements. My attention to detail and excellent writing and documentation skills further enhance my ability to deliver high-quality work.

I speak Russian as the mother tongue and English. I enjoy needlework, calisthenics, reading popular science literature, and learning Chinese.

I enclose my curriculum vitae and look forward to hearing from you. I will be available for an interview at any time.
Yours sincerely,
Mary

Answer 1

Your text is generally well-written and clear. However, I've made a few minor corrections and adjustments for improved readability:

In June 2020, I received a diploma in secondary general education with an emphasis on the socio-economic profile from Gymnasium 15. Since September 2020, I have been studying to become a system administrator at the Center for Information and Communication Technologies at the College of Entrepreneurship in Kiev.

I have completed comprehensive, internationally recognized courses. In 2020, I finished the course "Introduction to Networks," covering basic protocols, standards, and hardware configuration at the Cisco Networking Academy. In 2022, I completed courses on Switching, Routing, and Wireless Essentials at the Cisco Networking Academy, and I completed a course on Designing, Deploying, and Maintaining a WLAN network at the Huawei ICT Academy. Additionally, in 2023, I completed a course in Enterprise Networking, Security, and Automation at the Cisco Networking Academy.

I worked as an assistant system administrator at the College of Entrepreneurship (Center for Audiovisual Technologies) from June 2022 to July 2022 and from April 2023 to June 2023. My responsibilities included connecting network equipment, diagnosing and troubleshooting minor hardware problems, servicing client workstations and user accounts, maintaining software and applications (Microsoft, Windows, Adobe), setting up backups, maintaining inventory documentation, and providing user support for applications.

Beyond my technical skills, I possess excellent communication and organizational abilities. I am adept at working both independently and as part of a team, demonstrating adaptability and multitasking capabilities.

I am highly self-motivated and have a strong inclination towards self-learning, enabling me to keep up with rapidly changing technological advancements. My attention to detail and excellent writing and documentation skills further enhance my ability to deliver high-quality work.

I am fluent in Russian, my mother tongue, and English. Outside of work, I enjoy needlework, calisthenics, reading popular science literature, and learning Chinese.

I have enclosed my curriculum vitae and look forward to hearing from you. I am available for an interview at your convenience.

Yours sincerely,

[Your Name]