Question

срочно нужна помощь, нужно проверить грамотность английского текста.

I want to study at school, as well as now. There pupils would get an initial, main and secondary education. I want big and comfortable school with big windows that was light-. Besides I want huge library where there would be new books and computers. As it would be desirable a big gym. It has to be stvely. There would be exercise machines and many adaptations for sports. That at school there were own lockers for things and textbooks. Besides, at school have to be a big free dining room.At this school the best teachers would teach. They taught pupils to write, read, consider, draw, to good behavior. Pupils have to get a good education. Certainly, at school there have to be free facultative occupations. Besides there have to be many developing circles for pupils.As a result it is school there would be the best! The happiest pupils and teachers. This school can be considered the second house!

перевод:
Я хочу учиться в школе, как и сейчас. Там ученики получали бы начальное, основное и среднее образование. Хочу большую и комфортабельную школу с большими окнами, чтобы было светло. Кроме этого я хочу огромную библиотеку, где находились бы новые книги и компьютеры. Так же хотелось бы большой спортивный зал. Он должен быть светлым. Там находились бы тренажеры и много приспособлений для спорта. Чтобы в школе были собственные шкафчики для вещей и учебников. Кроме этого, в школе должны быть большая бесплатная столовая.В этой школе бы преподавали самые лучшие учителя. Они учили учеников писать, читать, считать, рисовать, хорошему поведению. Ученики должны получать хорошее образование. Конечно, в школе должны быть бесплатные факультативные занятия. Кроме этого должны быть много развивающих кружков для учеников.В итоге это школа была бы самая лучшая! Самые счастливые ученики и учителя. Эту школу можно считать вторым своим домом !

Answer 1

I want A big and comfortable school... не совсем поняла к чему там that was light
Besides i want A huge library 
where would be new books and computers. there там не нужно.
As it would be desirable a big gym. лучше сказать I also wanted a big gym или I also would like a big gym to be there. 
It has to be bright. 
That at school there were own lockers for things and textbooks.  английские предложения так не строятся. There must be own lockers for things and textbooks можно так употребить. 
Besides, at school have to be a big free dining room. правильнее Besides a big free dining room have to be at school. 
they taught - прошедшее време, а скорее всего нужно употребить they would teach
to good behavior. they would teach a good behavior.
скорее всего не pupils have to get... a- pupils need to get 
free facultative occupations have to be there. 
besides many developing circles for pupils have to be at school. 
as a result school would be the best
this school can be considered as the second house.

Answer 2

I would like to go to school, as I am doing now. The pupils there would get primari, secondary, and high education. I wish it were a big and comfortable school with mighty windows admitting a lot of light. I also wish there were a big library where with many new books and computers. And there would be a big gym also full of light. There would be training devices and a lot of sports equipment. The students would have their own lockers for their belongings and textbooks. There would also be a big canteen with free meals. I with that only the best teachers taught pupils to write, read, do sums, draw, and encourage good behavior. Pupils would get good education. Surely, there would be free facultative classes at school. There would also be many development groups of pupils. So, it has to be the best ever school with the happiest pupils and teachers who believe it to be their second home!