4 A. Read the group of sentences from weak paragraphs and say what makes them weak. Choose one or more of these reasons. 1. There is no topic sentence. 2. The sentences are not all about the same topic. 3. Some sentences say the same thing. My favourite activity is reading books. I like reading books. When I was a child, there were a lot of books in my room, One of them was a story book. I still keep that book. It is about Mozart, a famous musician. He was born in Salzburg, Austria. My uncle has been to Austria twice. B I started it 2 years ago. There is some land in front of our house and I can do gardening there easily. I have planted several types of flowers and a few vegetables in my garden. My cousin has a small garden, too. I like taking care of my garden in my free time. C Firstly, I learned to play the piano when I was 5 years old. My parents bought me a piano on my 7th birthday. I have had it since that time. Secondly, when I play the piano, I feel relaxed. I don't think about the music.
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Let's evaluate each group of sentences based on the given criteria:
A. The sentences are weak because:
1. There is no clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea of the paragraph.
2. The sentences are not all about the same topic. They start with the favorite activity of reading books but then shift to a storybook about Mozart, and the transition is not smooth.
3. Some sentences say the same thing, for example, "My favorite activity is reading books" and "I like reading books."
B. The sentences in this group are relatively clear and focused on the same topic, which is gardening. However, there is a lack of a clear topic sentence to introduce the main idea.
C. The sentences in this group are also clear and related to the same topic, which is learning to play the piano. However, there is no clear topic sentence to set the context for the reader.
To improve the paragraphs:
- In paragraph A, start with a clear topic sentence about the favorite activity and then transition smoothly to the storybook about Mozart if necessary.
- In paragraphs B and C, add a topic sentence at the beginning to introduce the main idea. This will help the reader understand the focus of the paragraphs.
Revised paragraph A (for example):
"My favorite activity is reading books. I've always had a deep love for literature. When I was a child, there were a lot of books in my room, and one of them was a storybook about Mozart, a famous musician. I still keep that book, and it brings back fond memories of my childhood."
Revised paragraphs