Question

Проверьте, пожалуйста, текст! Те, кто просто напишут, что всё правильно получат удалённый ответ. Запятые тоже надо проверить. Чем можно заменить слово so?

Hello, Mr. Brown! My name is Eugene and I’m 9th grade student. I like traveling and doing some sports, so your summer camp is interesting for me.
In this summer I have a lot of time, so I can stay for 3 weeks from the beginning of July. For my opinion, at this time the weather is the best, but that’s very important for outdoor activities.
I would choose adventure workshop, because I tried diving last year and really liked it. Also I have experience in film making, so film academy workshop would be interesting for me. I could help another children and learn something new.
Best regards,
Eugene.

Answer 1

Итак, начнём!

1 .so можно заменить that's why-вот почему (перевод)

2 надо исправить:

-I'm the 9th grade student.

-travelling

-This summer I'll have a lot of time.....

-....I can stay(здесь надо написать где ты хочешь остановиться, предложение незаконченное).............

-In my opinion.......

-не надо писать at this time.......просто This time.......

-Also I have an experience......

Good luck

Answer 2

Hello, Mr. Brown!

My name is Eugene and I’m a 9th grader. I enjoy traveling and playing several sports, because of that I am interested in your summer camp.

This summer I’ll have lots of time on hand, and would like to participate for 3 weeks starting early July. In my opinion, that’s when the weather is best, which it’s highly important for outdoor activities.

I would love to do the adventure workshop, I’ve tried diving last year and really liked it. Also I have some experience in film making, so the film academy workshop sounds quite interesting. I look forward to helping other campers and learning new things .

Best regards,

Eugene.